I like how you made some parts seem a little bit less important, and the "more important" parts, you really added great proof! I think you could maybe make your examples match a bit more. But otherwise, it was perfect!
Amazing job biba😃 I loved how you listed things, and how your voice was very clear. I also loved how you asked questions and used transitions, as well as thinking in italics, and you made it clear when you transitioned to a new paragraph. Once again, GREAT JOB!
I liked when you put in quotes from the short story you added a lot of explaining to show how they fit in with your claim. I thought it was an amazing essay. Good job!
👍you are bringing parts from the book and you are pointing the lesson that you learned
ReplyDeleteI like how you made some parts seem a little bit less important, and the "more important" parts, you really added great proof! I think you could maybe make your examples match a bit more. But otherwise, it was perfect!
ReplyDeleteGreat claim and I love how you used many words to explained it! Maybe you should read a tiny a little bit quieter. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteAmazing job biba😃 I loved how you listed things, and how your voice was very clear. I also loved how you asked questions and used transitions, as well as thinking in italics, and you made it clear when you transitioned to a new paragraph. Once again, GREAT JOB!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used a lot of transitions and you put in a lot of reasons to support your reasoning.
ReplyDeleteI like how you talk clearly and loud and give alot of examples
ReplyDeleteHabiba, I loved it so much, I couldn't breathe! Thats how much I loved it!
ReplyDeletelove your claim😘😀
ReplyDeleteI liked when you put in quotes from the short story you added a lot of explaining to show how they fit in with your claim. I thought it was an amazing essay. Good job!
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